Well, the track sound good, but in my opinion the drums (especially the snare) should be a little punchier and the sup is a bit too loud. Just make some bigger duckings and turn the sub a bit down and it will turn from good to A W E S O M E !
This version is much better, the only thing I would do is to add a kick or an impact at the break on 2:55 and then maybe a rise or reverse sample. Beside that I think it's great as it is.